Since I am finally FINALLY trying to finish “the trial” I thought why not share another excerpt of my ever-under-construction book
Run..run!
She closed her eyes.
Her heart hammering wildly, lungs fighting their own battle.
And she was running..
Focusing all her energy on her unbelievably heavy feet.
She was giving it all. As if death was chasing her. Or even worse her inner demons, her fears, her insecurities.
Her trainers plowed the wet ground of the woods.
Hair freed from confines as always.
Eyes blank.
Rebellious thin branches of trees hit her at every step, yet failed to hinder her pace.
Something inside was crushing her rib cage. She was about to explode when she tripped over and fell flat on her face.
Elbows..my elbows.
My knees..
Perpetual déjà vu..
Her 12 years old version played right in front of her eyes. Everyday tripping falling slipping and then being Treated for funny minor wounds was normal.
As normal as breathing.
For few years she never saw actual colour of her knees. There was always a pink layer of skin ready to be broken and bruised again.
In a second she propelled all of her energy from her feet to head. It shot up and hit her brain..crashed!!
She grabbed wild tapestry of the ground. Clenched leaves and wet soil in her fists. And her lids gave in again.
She felt tears marking a meek trail on her face and draining into the land of her imagination.
Her eyes opened to see wet pages of her journal. Ink marbling with salty water. Her hands gripping it so tight, it hurt.
And there was something piercing centre of her chest.
She looked at the fresh bruise on her knee and burst out laughing..
Her demented laughter stabbed and slashed the daunting silence of empty room.
Tears still streaming down..
Copyright © 2018 stoneronarollercoaster – All rights reserved
For Sue Vincent’s Thursday Photo Prompt.
Oh, I really liked this. The pacing of the excerpt kept me reading and I wanted to find out what happened. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you so much Teresa. I just picked a random except. Didnt have time (brain) to work on it.
Thanks alot 🙂
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You’re welcome. When your finished with it, I would love to read it all.
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I hope i do it in this life 😆
Pray i stop being a lazyass and work on it.
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I am so with you on that. I have procrastinated when it comes to my novel as well. But it’s a new year and I’ve decided that I am going to finish it. At least the first complete draft anyway.
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Been there said that..😆
There were days i wrote like crazy and then there are brain freeze days..
Actually whole story has changed so i dont know. I am not forcing it. Letting it take its own shape
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I think that’s the best way to do it. Let the story write itself.
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thats what I am doing 🙂
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Ok, this I gotta read from the beginning. This was riveting.
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Ahahhaa 😊
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Your story is shaping up so well! The words have this electricity cackling within them that keeps the reader hooked. Waiting for the next excerpt.
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Thank you so much hun for appriciating. Means alot 🤗
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You’re most welcome 🙂
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🙂
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Beautiful read, I can’t wait to read the next excerpt. 🙂
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Thanks hun. Im glad you liked it 🙂
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That was amazing Alyana. 😀
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Thank you Nenad 🙂
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Hey, I just write what I think. You’ll get your novel published in no time. 😀
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InshAllah (if God wills) 🙂
Thanks for support 🙂
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Aferim. 😀
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Aferim?
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0K, it’s a word we took from Turkish. It means like “Bravo/Long live and see”.
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I don’t know Turkish..so how would I know.. 🙂
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It has so many similar things with the Arabic. That’s why. I thought you had something similar so you would understand or something. Ugh, I fail at this. I always assume something would be cool, and it turns wrong.
You don’t need to translate IshAllah. I heard it thousand times. Excuse me for asking, does “merhaba” means something in your language?
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no. I can’t speak arabic. I can only read it (as Quran is in arabic)
and I not Emarati I am Pakistani so my native language is Urdu not Arabic.
its ok. you didn’t fail. its nice to experience diversity.
“”Marhaba” is an Arabic words, it is used in middle east to greet people, as Hello in English and Namaste in Hindi” I picked this from google. I never heard people saying Marahaba in UAE a lot normally to greet they say Salam.
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0K, just checking. Merahaba is also a way people greet each other in muslim parts of Bosnia, so I wanted to see under whose influence they were. That’s all. 😀 Sorry to bother you with my confused brain. 😀
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That’s something, I was so engrossed in reading that I forgot I was reading and it all unfolded in front of my eyes like a movie. The way you write is brilliant.
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Wow. Ahaha. I am humbled. Thank you so much 🙂
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🙂
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Now that’s clever..
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Really?? 😀
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Yep.. And stop showing me your teeth.
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You are an amazing writer. A serious one. When u find something clever it means it is clever! So 😀
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You really need better writer as friends. I know for a fact that I’m terrible, in fact you are way better than me.
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Thats a lie. You are just being modest.
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I never lie Stoner.
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Really???
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Yep took a pledge during first year of grad school. Kept it true since than. A reason perhaps why people don’t like my company.
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Pledge?? What did u study??
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The pledge was a personal choice Stoner. OK, gotta go. Bye.
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Okie bye 🙂
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Exceptional piece!
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Thank you. now I believe it 🙂
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You are welcome! 🙂
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🙂
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So interesting. Your descriptive writing is excellent!
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Thanks a lot Clair. I am humbled.
every word of appreciation catapults my motivation to whole new level.🙂
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Where do the dreams end, and life begins, The running, the absolute running is something described by so many in their dream worlds. Very apt description.
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I always imagine myself running.
never understood why.
thanks for stopping by 🙂
(it rhymed)
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this is super amazing girl your doing great i loved it! xox
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thanks hun. glad you liked it xoxo 🙂
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Liked the short, punchy sentences, really added to the action. Keep going with the book, it will be worth it when you reach the end 🙂
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Almost gave up on it. Writing novel is so emotionally draining. You literally feel burnt
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I’m at the editing and rewriting 2nd draft stage too. I am not enjoying it so far…!
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I am not even done with the first draft.
Got so tired and upset.
At least you know your story. I dont even know my story.
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I wish I could tell you it gets easier…
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feeling so much better already..thank you..
I guess I should just go to sleep and forget about it.
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بہت اچھا لکھا
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Ahhahahaahhahaha 😆😂🤣
How did this even happen???
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just google translated it…
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I guessed it..but its pure urdu. How did you know my mother tongue is urdu?
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you said in answer to a question, i’m aware that many of my friends write in english as a second language. Just think we should try to reciprocate if we can. I will let you into a secret… I have a tattoo in urdu. It says Maria my soulmate in a circle
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Awwww
O my God.
I was surprised urdu is not a famous language. Even though it’s a beautiful language.
This is such an adorable gesture. The tattoo and you appriciating my work in my first language.
Thank you so much. Means alot to me.
I was walking on corniche when i saw this comment and i was smiling so broad people were looking at me like..what happened to her 😆
Thank you 😊
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you are very welcome. i picked urdu for my one tattoo because it looked so pretty
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Yep…it fits beautifully 🙂
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See?? I saw the picture and … damn i have written on that.
Love to be the part of it 🙂
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Well, if it works, why waste it 😉
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Great atmosphere building. Like everyone else who read this, I too want to read more. So all the best for your novel 🙂
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Thank you so much for appriciating. Means alot. 🙂
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Please finish your story! It is good. You are meant to write and share your gift!!
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This is so kind of you.
I just got lost a little. I will resume now.
Thanks alot for encouraging i was sceptical 🙂
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